无老师优秀范例: A clear career goal is the cornerstone of student’s future development. Providing a targeted course about career planning can give orientations of students’ suitable occupation development. Introductions for proper fields may inspire students’ interests on acquiring more specific knowledge by themselves. Also, this process will help build a bridge from the tower of ivory to a real society. Adequately preparations and practical skills will be taught about dealing with relationships with interviewers and workmates in the future. Thus, students benefit a lot for having deeper comprehension about career and their suitable jobs.
无老师优秀翻译：一个清晰的职业目标是学生未来发展的基石.为将来的职业规划学一门目标课程,可以给学生们合适的职业发展的方向。对于合适的领域的介绍，可以激发学生们自己获取更多专业知识的兴趣。同时，这样的过程，也会帮助建立一个，从象牙塔通向现实社会的桥梁。充分的准备和实用的技巧将会被传授，它们包括如何在将来处理与面试者和同事的关系。因此，学生们会学到很多对于职业和合适的工作的深入的理解。
无老师平庸范例：A clear job plan is the footstone of the future development. Studying a target class for career plan will give students proper job plan. The introduction of the proper field will encourage the interest of getting more professional knowledge by themselves. At the same time, the process will help to build a bridge which connect the tower of elephant's tusk and the society. Good preparation and useful skills will be taught, it will include how to solve the relationship with the interviewer and the colleagues. So students will a lot about the job plan and the proper job.
如果，我们将所有的优秀作文，进行横向比较的话，本篇作文一定不是在句式上取胜的！本篇优秀范例的优点，主要就是在于用词！但是当用词非常准确时，就会出现一个问题，就是优秀范例与平庸范例之间的差别不大，因此本次的讲解主要在于优秀范例！
首先第一句，优秀范例：A clear career goal is the cornerstone of students’ future development.对比平庸范例：A clear job plan is the footstone of the future development.显然这里优秀范例的goal这个词我们很少想到，我们经常就是在使用clear career这样的表达方法，很少想到与goal连在一起。其后cornerstone基石这个词，也充分显示出作者的词汇量，平时我们还是用basic多一点。
接下来，优秀范例Providing a targeted course about career planning can give orientations of students’ suitable occupation development.对比平庸范例：Studying a target class for career plan will give students proper job plan.优秀范例的第一亮点就在于targeted这个词的使用，将target这个平时最为常见于名词词性的词动词化，然后再用其的过去分词形式，很漂亮！然后orientation和occupation其实与introduction和job以及career意思都很接近，但是作者就是能用不同的表达方式，就是要秀自己的词汇量！
第三句，优秀范例：Introductions for proper fields may inspire students’ interests on acquiring more specific knowledge by themselves.比较于平庸范例The introduction of the proper field will encourage the interest of getting more professional knowledge by themselves.这个第三句的优秀范例实在是觉得在job、career这几个词来回游荡太乏味了，于是写出了field“领域“，但是由于前面都是在写“工作”，我们自然也心领神会，这是工作或者专业领域。然后inspire自然用的是很地道，平庸范例的对应词encourage就实在是“呵呵”了，用在这里稍显中式英语。至于最后，当然是acquire和specific这两个词用的很好。
第四句的优点则在于作者阅读量，或者作者的一点点文采！优秀范例：Also, this process will help build a bridge from the tower of ivory to a real society.对比平庸范例：At the same time, the process will help to build a bridge which connect the tower of elephant's tusk and the society.“架起了两者之间的桥梁“。虽然读起来略像是小学生作文之中的句子，但是能用在这篇严肃的议论文中，已经很有文学气息了，好么！而且作者后面的“象牙塔”写的还那么准确tower of ivory。再回头看平庸范例的the tower of elephant's tusk，简直就是good good study, day day up的翻版啊！不自黑一下，难平民愤啊！
其后，优秀范例为Adequately preparations and practical skills will be taught about dealing with relationships with interviewers and workmates in the future.再来看平庸范例：Good preparation and useful skills will be taught, it will include how to solve the relationship with the interviewer and the colleagues.看到这里真的觉得作者已经非常痛苦了！大而空的东西写多了，真的是难以为继啊！作者好不容易又想到了，课程里面该教点什么？自然要教一些技能了！于是就又写出了Adequately preparations and practical skills。否则作者真的要抓狂了。至于后面的interviewers和workmates，应该算是中等偏上的表达方法，算不得特别亮眼。
最后一句，优秀范例写的是Thus, students benefit a lot for having deeper comprehension about career and their suitable jobs.平庸范例则是潦草收场So students will a lot about the job plan and the proper job.看到优秀范例的having真的忍不住蛋疼菊紧，你们以后再用having的时候，能不能试一下去掉having，看看这句话是否通顺！很多情况下，我们用的have用的是真没必要！至于优点，优秀范例的benefit和comprehension也是可以算中等偏上的，但是仅此而已。平庸范例？算了吧，太幼稚园了！
无老师平庸范例：A clear job plan is the footstone of the future development. Studying a target class for career plan will give students proper job plan. The introduction of the proper field will encourage the interest of getting more professional knowledge by themselves. At the same time, the process will help to build a bridge which connect the tower of elephant's tusk and the society. Good preparation and useful skills will be taught, it will include how to solve the relationship with the interviewer and the colleagues. So students will a lot about the job plan and the proper job.
如果，我们将所有的优秀作文，进行横向比较的话，本篇作文一定不是在句式上取胜的！本篇优秀范例的优点，主要就是在于用词！但是当用词非常准确时，就会出现一个问题，就是优秀范例与平庸范例之间的差别不大，因此本次的讲解主要在于优秀范例！
首先第一句，优秀范例：A clear career goal is the cornerstone of students’ future development.对比平庸范例：A clear job plan is the footstone of the future development.显然这里优秀范例的goal这个词我们很少想到，我们经常就是在使用clear career这样的表达方法，很少想到与goal连在一起。其后cornerstone基石这个词，也充分显示出作者的词汇量，平时我们还是用basic多一点。
接下来，优秀范例Providing a targeted course about career planning can give orientations of students’ suitable occupation development.对比平庸范例：Studying a target class for career plan will give students proper job plan.优秀范例的第一亮点就在于targeted这个词的使用，将target这个平时最为常见于名词词性的词动词化，然后再用其的过去分词形式，很漂亮！然后orientation和occupation其实与introduction和job以及career意思都很接近，但是作者就是能用不同的表达方式，就是要秀自己的词汇量！
第三句，优秀范例：Introductions for proper fields may inspire students’ interests on acquiring more specific knowledge by themselves.比较于平庸范例The introduction of the proper field will encourage the interest of getting more professional knowledge by themselves.这个第三句的优秀范例实在是觉得在job、career这几个词来回游荡太乏味了，于是写出了field“领域“，但是由于前面都是在写“工作”，我们自然也心领神会，这是工作或者专业领域。然后inspire自然用的是很地道，平庸范例的对应词encourage就实在是“呵呵”了，用在这里稍显中式英语。至于最后，当然是acquire和specific这两个词用的很好。
第四句的优点则在于作者阅读量，或者作者的一点点文采！优秀范例：Also, this process will help build a bridge from the tower of ivory to a real society.对比平庸范例：At the same time, the process will help to build a bridge which connect the tower of elephant's tusk and the society.“架起了两者之间的桥梁“。虽然读起来略像是小学生作文之中的句子，但是能用在这篇严肃的议论文中，已经很有文学气息了，好么！而且作者后面的“象牙塔”写的还那么准确tower of ivory。再回头看平庸范例的the tower of elephant's tusk，简直就是good good study, day day up的翻版啊！不自黑一下，难平民愤啊！
其后，优秀范例为Adequately preparations and practical skills will be taught about dealing with relationships with interviewers and workmates in the future.再来看平庸范例：Good preparation and useful skills will be taught, it will include how to solve the relationship with the interviewer and the colleagues.看到这里真的觉得作者已经非常痛苦了！大而空的东西写多了，真的是难以为继啊！作者好不容易又想到了，课程里面该教点什么？自然要教一些技能了！于是就又写出了Adequately preparations and practical skills。否则作者真的要抓狂了。至于后面的interviewers和workmates，应该算是中等偏上的表达方法，算不得特别亮眼。
最后一句，优秀范例写的是Thus, students benefit a lot for having deeper comprehension about career and their suitable jobs.平庸范例则是潦草收场So students will a lot about the job plan and the proper job.看到优秀范例的having真的忍不住蛋疼菊紧，你们以后再用having的时候，能不能试一下去掉having，看看这句话是否通顺！很多情况下，我们用的have用的是真没必要！至于优点，优秀范例的benefit和comprehension也是可以算中等偏上的，但是仅此而已。平庸范例？算了吧，太幼稚园了！