无老师优秀范例：A more realistic and rational criterion to value teachers' work (and therefore decide their salary) should include factors such as comprehensive developments of students, teachers' own capacity to cultivate and educate, and parents' feedback. Yet my disagreement does not suggest that students' performance should be abandoned but rather included along with other indispensable factors in evaluating teachers' work, since school report is still among most parents' top concerns and students have to use it as anchor when applying for further studies. Also, it is reasonable that teachers who can enhance students' performance should be paid better, as the measure would moderately motivate teachers to work hard.
无老师优秀翻译：一个衡量教师工作，同时也可以决定教师工资的更为现实的，同时也是更为理性的标准应该包括如下这些因素，比如对于学生的全面发展，教师自己的提升及教学能力，以及对于家长的反馈。但是，我的意见并不是说学生的表现可以不被列入考察范围，我认为当判断学生的表现的时候，应当结合评价教师工作的很多其它必不可少的因素一起讨论，因为学生们最终的成绩还是大多数家长最关心的，同时当学生们申请学校的时候要把这些成绩作为一个衡量自己的标准。而且，那些能够提高学生成绩的教师得到更好的报酬也是很合理的，因为只有这样的方法才会激励教师更努力的工作。
无老师平庸范例：When we want to judge a teacher’s work, a more realistic and rational standard should include the following parts, such as, the students’ whole development, the ability of improving themselves and enhancing their educating, and the parents’ responses. But, I do not disagree with that we should not consider the students’ performance. When we want to judge the students’ performance, I believe that we should combine a lot of other indispensable parts of judging teachers’ work. Because what most parents care about is the final scores, and the final scores also are important standard to determine the students. But also, the teachers who could promote the students’ score should get well paid, which could encourage the teachers to work hard.
无老师精析：遣词造句的差别才是真正决定一个人分数的高低，而不是单纯的思路或者结构。思路或者结构真的只是皮毛之功，今天的优秀范例与平庸范例就是一个很好的体现。这里优秀范例是典型的满分作文，而平庸范例虽然意思上所查无几，但是最多也就是18分的水平，这就是遣词造句的实力的差别。
首先第一句：优秀范例A more realistic and rational criterion to value teachers' work (and therefore decide their salary) should include factors such as comprehensive developments of students, teachers' own capacity to cultivate and educate, and parents' feedback.对比平庸范例When we want to judge a teacher’s work, a more realistic and rational standard should include the following parts, such as, the students’ whole development, the ability of improving themselves and enhancing their educating, and the parents’ responses.首先在“判断，评价”教师工作这一点上，优秀范例用了value这里将平时常用作名词的value取它的动词的意思“评判”可以说对于词汇的感觉很棒，而且前面在说“标准”的时候，还用到了criterion一词，这个词托福阅读当中出现过，但是能用在作文里的考生真的是少之又少，可以说这2个词用的很棒。本句话后半句，“对于学生全面的理解”，大多数考友只能像平庸范例一样想到whole development，这就是典型的小学词汇与学术词汇之间的差别。而且与之并列的，优秀范例之中的capacity to cultivate and educate对比平庸范例improving themselves and enhancing their educating显然平庸范例只能很贫乏的想到improve这样的大陆词汇，但是优秀范例之中很有深度的想到了cultivate而且用to与之前的capacity进行连接，而不是落俗套的用of亦或者是‘s进行连接，可以说作者平时的阅读非常用心，而且优秀范例最后的parents' feedback简洁明确，因为feedback本身就很精确地表达人对人的类似于咨询的明确反馈，而平庸范例的response意思范围就很广，也可以表示一对一咨询的反馈，也可以表示物理或者化学实验中的连锁反应。
解析来优秀范例的第二句话就写得非常巧妙了！Yet my disagreement does not suggest that students' performance should be abandoned but rather included along with other indispensable factors in evaluating teachers' work, since school report is still among most parents' top concerns and students have to use it as anchor when applying for further studies.对比平庸范例But, I do not disagree with that we should not consider the students’ performance. When we want to judge the students’ performance, I believe that we should combine a lot of other indispensable parts of judging teachers’ work. Because what most parents care about is the final scores, and the final scores also are important standard to determine the students.首先优秀范例用disagreement来表示“反面意见”这个很少见。而且优秀范例直接说“my disagreement does not suggest that”——“我的不赞同并不是说”来具体说明自己的观点，这个写得很有新意，颇有GRE作文的感觉。后面优秀范例又用了一个“should be abandoned”来表示对前面意见的否定，也是很有新意。不愧为满分作文。然后紧接着又用but rather引出自己的观点，可以说一气呵成，漂亮！而且下面的评判某人没有像平庸范例一样用了judge，而是交出来了evaluate，与前面的value也是不同，可以说作者作者不仅阅读量很大，而且能学以致用，非常棒！后面，优秀范例，又用了一个since来表示“因为”跳出了单纯用because之类的词的束缚，也是显示出作者水平很高。其后，两个亮点“still among most parents' top concerns”与“use it as anchor”显然，among这个词我们都认识，甚至有人考友还用过，但是“among most parents' top concerns”——“仍然是家长们最关心的”这里的“是”没有简单的用is来进行连接，可以说很漂亮！而且作者又想表达“评判，评价”的意思，但是作者没有简单的用“value”或者是“evaluate”而是将意思进行延伸和扩展，既然想评价，就一定要有一个标准，这个标准就是一个恒久不变的东西，这也恰恰就是“锚”的作用，因此引出了“use it as anchor”来表示评价某人之意，已经有听力之中的弦外之音的考点的感觉了！怎能不令人动容！
最后一句优秀范例：Also, it is reasonable that teachers who can enhance students' performance should be paid better, as the measure would moderately motivate teachers to work hard.对比平庸范例But also, the teachers who could promote the students’ score should get well paid, which could encourage the teachers to work hard.显然优秀范例的亮点就是在于it is reasonable that来替代平庸范例中的could，这是我们平时没想到的。以及最后的motivate“驱动”表示使得教师有一个自我引导的感觉，给教师做出一个势头，可以让教师自愿的去完善自己，而不是像平庸范例的encourage，仅表示“鼓励”，但是教师是否自己想去做，却是不一定的。
看到这里各位考友应该清楚，优秀范例的作文，如果不给满分的话，几乎是天理不容啊！
无老师优秀翻译：一个衡量教师工作，同时也可以决定教师工资的更为现实的，同时也是更为理性的标准应该包括如下这些因素，比如对于学生的全面发展，教师自己的提升及教学能力，以及对于家长的反馈。但是，我的意见并不是说学生的表现可以不被列入考察范围，我认为当判断学生的表现的时候，应当结合评价教师工作的很多其它必不可少的因素一起讨论，因为学生们最终的成绩还是大多数家长最关心的，同时当学生们申请学校的时候要把这些成绩作为一个衡量自己的标准。而且，那些能够提高学生成绩的教师得到更好的报酬也是很合理的，因为只有这样的方法才会激励教师更努力的工作。
无老师平庸范例：When we want to judge a teacher’s work, a more realistic and rational standard should include the following parts, such as, the students’ whole development, the ability of improving themselves and enhancing their educating, and the parents’ responses. But, I do not disagree with that we should not consider the students’ performance. When we want to judge the students’ performance, I believe that we should combine a lot of other indispensable parts of judging teachers’ work. Because what most parents care about is the final scores, and the final scores also are important standard to determine the students. But also, the teachers who could promote the students’ score should get well paid, which could encourage the teachers to work hard.
无老师精析：遣词造句的差别才是真正决定一个人分数的高低，而不是单纯的思路或者结构。思路或者结构真的只是皮毛之功，今天的优秀范例与平庸范例就是一个很好的体现。这里优秀范例是典型的满分作文，而平庸范例虽然意思上所查无几，但是最多也就是18分的水平，这就是遣词造句的实力的差别。
首先第一句：优秀范例A more realistic and rational criterion to value teachers' work (and therefore decide their salary) should include factors such as comprehensive developments of students, teachers' own capacity to cultivate and educate, and parents' feedback.对比平庸范例When we want to judge a teacher’s work, a more realistic and rational standard should include the following parts, such as, the students’ whole development, the ability of improving themselves and enhancing their educating, and the parents’ responses.首先在“判断，评价”教师工作这一点上，优秀范例用了value这里将平时常用作名词的value取它的动词的意思“评判”可以说对于词汇的感觉很棒，而且前面在说“标准”的时候，还用到了criterion一词，这个词托福阅读当中出现过，但是能用在作文里的考生真的是少之又少，可以说这2个词用的很棒。本句话后半句，“对于学生全面的理解”，大多数考友只能像平庸范例一样想到whole development，这就是典型的小学词汇与学术词汇之间的差别。而且与之并列的，优秀范例之中的capacity to cultivate and educate对比平庸范例improving themselves and enhancing their educating显然平庸范例只能很贫乏的想到improve这样的大陆词汇，但是优秀范例之中很有深度的想到了cultivate而且用to与之前的capacity进行连接，而不是落俗套的用of亦或者是‘s进行连接，可以说作者平时的阅读非常用心，而且优秀范例最后的parents' feedback简洁明确，因为feedback本身就很精确地表达人对人的类似于咨询的明确反馈，而平庸范例的response意思范围就很广，也可以表示一对一咨询的反馈，也可以表示物理或者化学实验中的连锁反应。
解析来优秀范例的第二句话就写得非常巧妙了！Yet my disagreement does not suggest that students' performance should be abandoned but rather included along with other indispensable factors in evaluating teachers' work, since school report is still among most parents' top concerns and students have to use it as anchor when applying for further studies.对比平庸范例But, I do not disagree with that we should not consider the students’ performance. When we want to judge the students’ performance, I believe that we should combine a lot of other indispensable parts of judging teachers’ work. Because what most parents care about is the final scores, and the final scores also are important standard to determine the students.首先优秀范例用disagreement来表示“反面意见”这个很少见。而且优秀范例直接说“my disagreement does not suggest that”——“我的不赞同并不是说”来具体说明自己的观点，这个写得很有新意，颇有GRE作文的感觉。后面优秀范例又用了一个“should be abandoned”来表示对前面意见的否定，也是很有新意。不愧为满分作文。然后紧接着又用but rather引出自己的观点，可以说一气呵成，漂亮！而且下面的评判某人没有像平庸范例一样用了judge，而是交出来了evaluate，与前面的value也是不同，可以说作者作者不仅阅读量很大，而且能学以致用，非常棒！后面，优秀范例，又用了一个since来表示“因为”跳出了单纯用because之类的词的束缚，也是显示出作者水平很高。其后，两个亮点“still among most parents' top concerns”与“use it as anchor”显然，among这个词我们都认识，甚至有人考友还用过，但是“among most parents' top concerns”——“仍然是家长们最关心的”这里的“是”没有简单的用is来进行连接，可以说很漂亮！而且作者又想表达“评判，评价”的意思，但是作者没有简单的用“value”或者是“evaluate”而是将意思进行延伸和扩展，既然想评价，就一定要有一个标准，这个标准就是一个恒久不变的东西，这也恰恰就是“锚”的作用，因此引出了“use it as anchor”来表示评价某人之意，已经有听力之中的弦外之音的考点的感觉了！怎能不令人动容！
最后一句优秀范例：Also, it is reasonable that teachers who can enhance students' performance should be paid better, as the measure would moderately motivate teachers to work hard.对比平庸范例But also, the teachers who could promote the students’ score should get well paid, which could encourage the teachers to work hard.显然优秀范例的亮点就是在于it is reasonable that来替代平庸范例中的could，这是我们平时没想到的。以及最后的motivate“驱动”表示使得教师有一个自我引导的感觉，给教师做出一个势头，可以让教师自愿的去完善自己，而不是像平庸范例的encourage，仅表示“鼓励”，但是教师是否自己想去做，却是不一定的。
看到这里各位考友应该清楚，优秀范例的作文，如果不给满分的话，几乎是天理不容啊！